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in Date the Cheerleader Take the World

27th Aug 2017, 1:34 AM
Between having to be up during the day for work, errands, and dog siting, the wow beta, and a few busy nights in a row care giving I lost track of how much sleep I got last week. I know I never got 8 hours at once for the first time Monday, and felt worlds better afterwords. I tried to sleep I really did but I seemed to have to be up and doing things at least three times a day all evenly spaced, and when I did get get a chance to sleep my allergies made it a lot harder to actually get to sleep. I'm sort of use to sleeping split shift style now but having it take an extra 45 min to fall asleep each time really adds up fast I guess. Point being I no longer feel like the living dead and with a few more days to recover I should be back to normal, or as normal as can be expected.
Black Redshirt: out of the way little man, she's mine.
Black Redshirt: It's time for you to meet your maker!
Robin: Been there. Done that. He gave me a T-shirt. These boots though i got for myself.


This is a good, dynamic rendition of Robin in today's strip. For some reason, largely I suspect to do with her eyelines, she has frequently for me come across as divorced from her surroundings rather than part of them. Ironically (because you introduced her later) Charity has worked better this way for a while now.

Also, the tailless speech bubbles still aren't working for me (even if as today whose is which is obvious from context), and the colour coding isn't as effective for those of us who are partly, let alone fully, colour-blind.

5th Apr 2012, 8:29 PM edit delete reply

I'll have to take a look at the eye lines (if you have any particularly good or bad examples please point them out).
as for the colored speech bubbles, I never thought about color blindness as an issue before. I was not planing on using them in any of the other comics i have planed down the road. I have not been practicing drawing the tails though and fear they would be rather ugly if i started using then right away. the lack of tails also means i have more freedom where i place the bubbles which is why i originally choose this design. I'll have to think about it some more and research the tails before i decide on anything. if anyone else has feedback though it will make my decision easier.

8th Apr 2012, 1:34 AM edit delete reply

I like the colour-coding, I'm slightly colourblind, but not enough to be a problem. Sure it takes an extra second to tell the colours apart on this page, and sometimes Charity and <that avatar in the jail>, but a closer look fixes it.
But... This isn't about me. It's about everyone. So, while I say colour-coding is generally good, if colourblindness is going to keep being an issue (which it most likely will)...
For tails, consider... Well, it's still ultimately tailless, but link all the bubbles together. That way, in this case, you know immediately that the same person speaks throughout all of the last panel, except for the first bubble. It's not much a stretch to figure it out from there. Especially if you link bubbles between panels.
However... I also wish to suggest the manga-style floating heads idea. Not necessarily to use, but at least to consider, and perhaps take elements of.

9th Apr 2012, 1:53 AM edit delete reply

I think i will try experimenting with tails connecting bubbles the opportunity i get. i don't think it would have worked on this page though since in panel one there is far too much space separating the bubbles and it would unbalance the panel to have them all on one side and just negative space on the other. also in panel one and two i use the space in between bubbles to add beats into the dialogue ( its a writing term for a slight pause in the flow of speech a bit bigger then a comma).

I have seen a few other comics have the dialogue in an author's note below the page with says what (example above) do you think that would help, solve the problem completely, or not be worth the time and space cluttering up the site?

9th Apr 2012, 9:59 PM edit delete reply

Awww. He doesn't look like "I'm totally going to murder you in your sleep". Now he looks like "Damn, where did my eyedrops go?"

6th Apr 2012, 1:17 AM edit delete reply

So, Robin is openly accepting that she is a pawn of your imagination?

6th Apr 2012, 8:47 PM edit delete reply

I wish, she just didn't correct the guy about me making the world and things (like her) in it. I would have had her say something less ambiguous if i had any control over her...

7th Apr 2012, 12:12 AM edit delete reply

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