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Page 49 the makeover

49 the makeover
Average Rating: 5 (2 votes)

in Damsel and Distress

20th Jul 2017, 4:22 PM
today's page is only one panel but there is a fair amount of detail in the background so hopefully that makes up for it. I was feeling a bit down since I wasn’t sure If I would be able to make 5 pages this week or not. I went back and counted and this will be the 5th by the calender although I am not sure if the one of the 15th was posted too late on Sunday night to count or actually on Monday. It all blurs after a while. I'm just going to post as many pages between now and Friday night as I can while packing up my stuff to move and cleaning the cabin. On the weekend I need to be building a shed evidently so I don’t think I will be able to work on the comic since we need to get it done in a day and a half. After that I will be moving and post what ever fan art and guest strips get sent in (so far only one but a few more people said they are working on it).

Comments:

Ok, so the name of the chapter is "Damsel in Distress." Robin in distress from her obsessive roommate, perhaps?

21st Aug 2011, 8:58 PM edit delete reply

well since there is an "and" between the damsel & distress they don't have to refer to the same person so you might be on to something.

21st Aug 2011, 9:33 PM edit delete reply

Ya creating someone who is not your friend in anyway has a slight chance of distressing you.

21st Aug 2011, 9:38 PM edit delete reply

Ah, I misread that. Read "in" instead of "and." Oops.

22nd Aug 2011, 12:11 AM edit delete reply

No problem. the original phrase uses "in" and you still got the right message so it means the writing is sound even after only a few pages.

22nd Aug 2011, 12:18 AM edit delete reply

**"you're not getting lipstick"** but who wears lipstick these days?! Still I have to admit I like the general idea :)

23rd Aug 2011, 12:02 AM edit delete reply

Charity wears lipstick, but mostly it was about the art design. Robin's mouth will be drawn the same way as before with a line while Charity's will have lips.

23rd Aug 2011, 1:15 AM edit delete reply

charity scares me. alot. also HI FROM TOGM! that's where i came from.

23rd Aug 2011, 2:04 AM edit delete reply

first why does charity scare you? she's sweet and innocent it says so right on her shirt.
second do you remember what first brought you over from togm? i left a comment today i know but i forget if i left one a while back or not.

23rd Aug 2011, 2:13 AM edit delete reply

Personally I see charity distressing the narrator, she is planning to eventually hijack the plot after all, just not yet.

29th Aug 2011, 9:26 PM edit delete reply

she can be a bit overbearing can't she?

29th Aug 2011, 10:06 PM edit delete reply

It's really hard to tell what's happening in this panel. The perspective of the bed makes it look like they are lying on it and making out, there's pretty much no motion or gesture to imply she's doing her hair, or any peripheral objects that one would use when doing hair.
There isn't any detail in the background. No one has such an empty house. If you're using the context of the story as an excuse then it'll just make your comic look bland and no one will take it seriously. I'm not trying to hate, just trying to give some constructive criticism.

2nd Sep 2011, 10:16 AM edit delete reply

I have never claimed to be a good artist. In fact i have almost absolutely no training in that area. I am trying to do better however, but i can only improve so fast. as for the room being empty it will of course get more clutter as they live in it more but this is the first day that either of them have physically been in the apartment, and frankly i would be thrilled if all my stuff was moved in before i was.

2nd Sep 2011, 1:46 PM edit delete reply

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