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Page 54 what to say

54 what to say
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27th Aug 2017, 1:34 AM
I had a lot of fun with charity's dialogue on this page. Hopefully the idea that robin was kind of tuning her out came across while still catching bits of what she was saying. After all you need to know a bit about a character's past but who wants to sit there for the full back story. The last panel is dedicated to Twitchy that way he will have to think really hard about how serious Charity is being in it.


Well played Mr. Faydale, but you shall find I am not so easily bamboozled!!

Is Charity ranting nonsense because Robins not listening, or is she revealing her devious plan to the inattentive Robin?!

Personally I would prefer the later option. There's so much potential to be had in a power struggle between Robin and Charity, due to the lack of a 4th wall this can be worked masterfully into the canon. Plus my mental assessment of Charity ever since her debut in strip 48 and 49(archive numbering not strip chronology) was that Robin poited up more than she could chew. Charity seemed very used to steamrolling over others objections to get her way, wanting to look like little ms.perfect, and as has just been revealed has the moneyed background to facilitate this attitude.
These same reasons are what give me the premonition that Charity is working to hijack the plot.

I think that Charity is being whimsical in the last panel, and has not thought heavily on if she will in fact consciously work towards usurping Robin. However she will later( perhaps soon) decide it wasn't a bad idea and make it a serious goal. In short Charity is a serious threat to Robin, even if she is not being so serious in this conversation.

To make it black and white so I can't weasel word my way out of this prediction: Charity will try to sabotage Robin in some way shape or form.

Perhaps with the help of Dr.M ^^

Personally I am really looking forward to the meeting of Dr.M and Charity, they both have such cast iron personalities that the result is sure to be spectacular.
( If it is spectacular like a train wreck or spectacular like a symphony is yet to be determined)

A story arc that had The Narrator/Robin v. Charity/Dr.M, would be entertaining.

Sorry for the novel, but I tend to thoroughly extrapolate on my thoughts.

9th Sep 2011, 6:34 PM edit delete reply

Don't feel bad about the long post. I treat them like books as long as their good i want them to be longer and more of them. I am leaving for the cabin for the weekend (my ride will be here any min) so i might not be able to fully respond before i have to go. I think i managed to fix all the edits in time, but someone else already pointed out one or two which i fixed before you posted so there was a bit of a discrepancy (hopefully the errors were gone and you just took a little while typing up your post). anyway I got to go finish a shed, but i will get back to you Sunday if i can't sooner.

9th Sep 2011, 7:02 PM edit delete reply

just figured out why i was confused. I fixed file 54.jpg and then uploaded P54.jpg should be all better now.

9th Sep 2011, 7:04 PM edit delete reply

I would be sad I didn't bamboozle you if it wasn't so rewarding when a reader sees so deep into a work, and likes it too. as for what direction Charity will go I don't want to give too many spoilers. partly because it would take a lot of the fun out of reading the comic as it happens, but also because i spent a good hunk of the weekend working with the next big story arc and haven't finished with it yet. I already know how this chapter ends of course, but it is always nice to work in some foreshadowing in for the next one and since chapter 4 will be the real start for the arc that will probably last till next fall i need to be sure I won't write my self into a corner down in may because of a choice i made now. I already found a bunch of corners I don't want to write my self into so I'm making good progress.

12th Sep 2011, 1:44 AM edit delete reply

I'm a huge fan of how you've managed to keep your comics looking better and better.

If you decide to make charity the villain, you could open up so many more options in the way of story and humor. Lots of people can relate to an aggravating roommate, and if you play around with it, you could wind up with some pretty hilarious stuff.

You could have a team up between Robin and M. It would be interesting to make the initial villain a hero. But you would have to account for the fact that M. is still owed a date with Charity, and you can turn that into whatever. Welp, that's an eyeful in itself, so I'll stow my comments to the brig until they're needed.

Good job, keep it up.

P.S., you should edit your comics for grammar, because the errors are fairly numerous. Nothing that can't be fixed by writing your script in Word first.

Okay, for I'm done now, good work!

12th Sep 2011, 1:14 AM edit delete reply

I have been fascinated by the idea of Villains as main characters for a while now, and do plan to do something rather big with that a bit down the road. I will say though that i believe in making most every character a shade of gray so you are likely to see some interesting stuff with charity down the road.
as to the grammar comment, it's on the list of things to do. rather near the top actually. I just need to figure out how to make it fool proof (cause I am trying my best now It is just not one of my strengths). I will be making an announcement later this week about an event, and if all goes well with that i should be able to get a bit more ahead on the comics. that i think will make the biggest difference since I don't truly see the text after staring at it for hours writing and drawing the comic and even a day would give me a fresh look at it.

12th Sep 2011, 1:34 AM edit delete reply

Your Robin/M team up sounds interesting.
Here is an alternative take:
M coerces Robin into helping him force a date with Charity(after she rejects him perhaps[this seems unlikely because he himself seems to not be terribly interested in a sabotaged from the start relationship like that]hypothetically though). Charity, as I see her, doesn't play well with others. This would end up with Dr.M still being a villain, and our two "heroes" at odds with each other, while still technically on the hero side.

This puts all 3 of our corporeal cast comfortably in the grey continuum.
Exemplified in: Batman, Rorschach.
The most interesting place to leave ones characters. A character with no flaws and conversely one with no redeeming qualities is only useful as a plot device, and generates no real interest by virtue of themselves.

And Kai, you might be interested in
"Evil Plan" by Alexis Royce over at A masterfully created villain centered storyline. Maybe your respective mad scientists can trade notes one day.

12th Sep 2011, 8:11 PM edit delete reply

While Charity does not play well with others, she was created to go on a date with M. Therefore, she has to go on a date with him! Perhaps this is how M survived the explosion in his lair. Because Charity was created as a date for M, the date itself was also created. Because the date exists, M cannot die, because if he were to die, he wouldn't be there to be at the date, and it would cease to exist. Because Robin created the date, it has to exist, and that cannot be undone. If M were to die, it would contradict that. So just because Robin created the date is an explanation for how M survives.

That's one way to go, and I love that you're taking time to look at the comic, because we're at an immense crossroads here. I know whatever path this comic takes, it will quite a ride

P.S., have fun getting used to your drawing pad! I'm looking forward to the art!

5th Oct 2011, 9:55 AM edit delete reply

Robin should really know that M has plot armor she just doesn't want to tell Charity about the date and is trying to rationalize a way out of it. Plot armor will come up more with Victor though so i look forward to seeing what you think of what i do with that.

5th Oct 2011, 3:11 PM edit delete reply

You also have to remember the unspoken plan guarantee (When there is a plan, things cannot go according to it. If they do, the plan becomes a spoiler.) sure the date will have to be dealt with later and there will be fewer options of how to do that with out sparky, but i doubt it will go as simply as he hopes.

5th Oct 2011, 3:37 PM edit delete reply

I loved how you did this page, with the faded words to show her being tuned out.

Ok, so I'm not being as verbose as other commenters, but in my defense, I am reading and posting on a quick break from work. You've got me addicted. ;)

12th Sep 2011, 11:49 AM edit delete reply

I'll take addiction :)

12th Sep 2011, 4:23 PM edit delete reply

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